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I would like you guys to critique this poem. What are changes I can make?? How can I make it longer?? If you want add to it please. Thanks
11 p.m on Rockingham drive
A wandering possum, well and alive,
Entered a cat door, secluded and dim,
Got into a room not intended for him,
And became such an instant disturber of peace
That the family summoned the city Police.
The lady policeman on duty that night
Knew not what to do-she had heard that possoms bite
The basement could not be closed with a door
To keep the intruder from wandering more,
And a call to the warden explaining their plight
Brought only his answer “ I won’t come tonight.”
This state of affairs might even be fun
For a man of experience like our “ Twenty-one”!
So off in his car for a fairly short ride,
He made himself known to the “ Sergeant “ Outside.
“ If it’s not out of place for me to stop by,
I’ve caught them before and will give it a try.”
The officer gave her permission and checked
To see if the owners at all would object.
She brought back their answer, “ OK, but it’s true
If the possum comes up, We’ll kill both of you”!!!
Ignoring this threat, Kevin asked for a broom
And made his way down to the occupied room.
And there on the windowsill, calm and collected,
Was the homely old fellow who never suspected
The fuss he had caused and the time it would take
To calm down the house and correct his mistake.
Kevin tickled his face according to plan,
And he promptly succumbed as a real possum can.
The grabbing its tail, he carried it out
Before the old fellow knew what was about,
But he quickly revived in time to run free
When set on the ground where he wanted to be.
So everyone’s happy things ended so well,
And even the possum has a story to tell!
Edited by ZachAttack (07/04/07 07:28 AM)
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